Comments on: Flash Fiction Friday: The Mountain Rises

By: Flash Fiction Friday: From White to Nothing « Caleb Monroe

Flash Fiction Friday: From White to Nothing « Caleb Monroe — Sat, 08 Mar 2008 05:14:47 +0000

[...] by Caleb Monroe on March 7, 2008 This my first flash fiction since November. It’s good to be back. This also the first of these originally written out longhand. [...]

By: Caleb Monroe

Caleb Monroe — Sun, 18 Nov 2007 05:54:31 +0000

Thanks for the feedback, Itai. I have my sites set on other things right now, but will definitely keep your thoughts in mind if I revisit this story for any reason. Been enjoying the latest series of your own flash fiction (that's over here for anyone reading these comments).

By: Itai Rosenbaum

Itai Rosenbaum — Sat, 17 Nov 2007 17:55:04 +0000

I liked this. The concept was awesome.
I do have some crits, though – your description started out fantastic – the Mountain God felt like a living, breathing being. I picture him in my head, the section about his sword was fantastic. The demon was not described as well. He seemed more generic and less thought out.

Also – a minor nitpick – from a physical standpoint, you can’t really melt an ocean…